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4 1.Expand more on the stakeholders, instead of just introducing who they are and what they provide, talk about them more in relations to the project?
Ways of improving: extract some important information or data only, and explain it while presentation not put them on ppt.
one point that I(we) think can be improved is, there are quite a lot of words on the ppt, which is kind of distraction from the presentation.